Anti-sense - another short story

[miriam_e]

Hi all. I have just written another short story (only 3 pages). This one is called Anti-sense.
I'd welcome any feedback on what you think.
http://werple.net.au/~miriam/stories/antisense.html
or
to read an intro and find a list of other stories:
http://werple.net.au/~miriam/#stories

Comments

[greylock.livejournal.com]

Brilliant ending.

[miriam-e.livejournal.com]

Why thank you sir. :)

[j03j03.livejournal.com]

nice.

[miriam-e.livejournal.com]

Thanks. :)