update for my story "Prescription"

I have re-read my story "Prescription" and made a lot of revisions. Doubtless there are many more that should be done. I know I am not a great storyteller, but I was really happy with all the ideas and concepts I present in this story. I'm especially proud of chapters 9. honesty and 16. nations. If you read it, please let me know what you think.
http://miriam-english.org/stories/books/prescription/index.html