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miriam_e ([personal profile] miriam_e) wrote2011-11-16 07:26 am

tiny extra update

On re-reading the end of the previous chapter before starting on the next I noticed the final paragraph was pretty poor. I added a little bit of atmosphere... not much, just a bit. In rewriting I will probably improve that further... one day. :)