chapter 5

[miriam_e]

The latest part of my Selena City story about a lesbian security worker in a near future where sexuality is not an issue.

part 5 Tourists (2254 words)

Sorry about the late update. Missed a day. Not very happy with this one. It is unbelievably difficult to write a day-in-the-life stuff without it degenerating into boring drivel or unlikely crap.

Let me know what you think of it.

Comments

[miriam-e.livejournal.com]

Actually, I haven't scrapped this chapter, but another which I haven't put online. My statement was a little ambiguous... oops.

There is certainly no hurry about the suggestions. I won't be editing till probably December or early next year. I come off this medication in January, I think... or is it February?... at which point I'll get my brains back, so it would probably be wisest for me to leave it till then. :)

[rpeate.livejournal.com]

Well, I sent my thoughts anyway!

I did not address punctuation at all, on purpose--I felt that was too nit-picky.

I am sensitive to tense because it was a problem of mine.

[miriam-e.livejournal.com]

Thanks Robert. :) Received.

I don't mind punctuation nit-picking. I don't always take them on board, but it is useful to have other points of view. I understand people not wanting to mention them as I've known religious wars to break out over punctuation (and spelling). That always struck me as odd because both punctuation and spelling are really in a state of flux and are quite arbitrary.

Tense, however, is extremely important and I try very hard to keep an eye on that, so catching slip-ups there is very much appreciated.