final chapter of Selena City

[miriam_e]

Not sure about this. It was the second thing I mapped out when I came up with the story more than a year ago. In writing this today from those old notes I found a lot of things had changed, though mostly it flowed pretty-much as I'd originally intended. My initial wish was to have the ending paragraphs as I've written them here, but I'm finding it hard to get perspective. Does it work? Or is the end stupid? Is the whole final chapter a mistake? I have no idea.

There were a couple of other things I wanted to put in, but they got squeezed out... oh well... maybe they'll make it into the rewrites.

I'm exhausted. I should have spent a couple of days on this instead of pushing it all into today. Doesn't bode well for next NaNo. [gulp]

Anyway... this final chapter:
http://miriam-english.org/stories/selena/18-solution.html

The index page for the whole thing:
http://miriam-english.org/stories/selena/index.html

Let me know what you think.

Comments

A tour de force!

[revbobbob.livejournal.com]

I love it! So many things I want to say, but can't for fear of spoiling it for people. It absolutely worked, down to the last second, the final period.

I'll write you as soon as I can get email working. I hadn't been in touch while you published the last chapters because of the death of my craptop (display died). Now I'm back from the shadows again, and if you could please tell me where Insurance" is. It died along with my old computer and all the addresses I stored there.

So when is the new one going to get finished?

Your adoring fan,

Bob Hussein Crispen

Re: A tour de force!

[miriam-e.livejournal.com]

Wow! Thanks Bob. I'm gobsmacked. Thank you.
Gosh.

http://miriam-english.org/stories/insurance_v02.html
It is not a terrific story though. It reads better if you think of it as a series of short stories, which is really what it is. It was my first, rather naive attempt to write long form. I had no idea it was so different from the short stories I've always written. So... it really came out as a series of shorts. I'm hoping to exploit that in the near future after I fix the weak parts, and maybe turn it into a series of comix... or maybe Ren'ai. I wish I could make it as VR fiction, but that scene seems to have pretty-much caved in... apart from Blender.

A week and a half to this year's NaNoWriMo. I'd been compiling notes over the past several months, but got jittery in the last few days and may be throwing all my preparation out in favor of another story idea I stumbled upon a couple of months ago. Eeeek! Such a change at the eleventh hour is not good for the nerves.

Still... I have to remind myself that I do NaNo to teach myself, and failing is a legitimate part of learning. The medication I'm on for this damn infection means I'll likely be too tired to complete the story in the month, but I don't care. I've decided to keep going in December till it is done. :)

This story (if I go for the alternate one) won't be science fiction. We'll see how well it goes. [gulp]

Thanks so much for reading Bob. I'm truly eternally grateful.

Hope your computer troubles are behind you.

Re: A tour de force!

[miriam-e.livejournal.com]

I've decided to make Insurance available directly from my site so people no longer need to ask for the "secret" address. After re-reading it I'm no longer quite as embarrassed by its faults.

Just go to http://miriam-english choose the link to stories and scroll down to the Insurance link.

I'll still fix it sometime... maybe next year.