chapter 15

[miriam_e]

The latest part of my Selena City story about Adele, a lesbian in a near future where sexuality is not an issue.

Okay. It finally happens. :D

If offended by lesbian sex do not read this chapter.

part 15 Lessons (3869 words)

Finally got this one done. Been working on it all day. It was unbelieveably difficult to write, not because of challenging subject matter, but because it is plain embarrassing, knowing it was going to be displayed in public and read by people who I know. (Hi Mum. Hi Dad. :)

Took forever to write the beginning of the sex sequence and I was despairing of ever getting it done, when the characters lost their patience with me, took over and wrote it themselves, much to my relief.

Ummm... I should mention that I have posted without being able to make sense of what I'm reading anymore. I'm tired and can no longer see it, so I'm warning you that it might be utter crap. Please let me know of any glaring faults.

Hope everybody enjoys it. Let me know what you think.

Comments

[blacks-empire.livejournal.com]

I have to echo the statements of everyone above me. The school was absolutely brilliant! I wish that the attitudes toward school or education in general was more like that. Here in Brazil the class sizes, even in the private schools, are horrendous. There are sometimes 60 to 80 kids in a class with one teacher. It's hard enough for me, being an ESL teacher to have 14 in my class and make sure all of them are learning at the same pace as the other kids in their classes.

The sex scene was beautiful. Very tasteful and sensual. It was very real and very sweet.

I don't know about Marcus. I don't think I like him even if he's nice right now. Something seems to be off, like he's trying to hard or overcompensating for what is really inside him... *arch brow* Maybe I'm just distrustful and don't think an assassin can change like that. *grin* It's a possibility.

Great job lady... Bravo again.

~K

[miriam-e.livejournal.com]

I'd like to expand on the school in the rewrite. It would be great if it could show people how natural such a setting is and how unnatural are the huge class sizes currently considered "normal". It would also be neat if I could show inventive ways to teach maths and other areas of knowledge.

It would be nice to make the sex scene more lingering and beautiful. It doesn't live up to what I wanted, but I'm glad most comments, like yours, indicate it is better than I thought. :)

Marcus may change in the rewrite. I want him to appear innocent, yet hints that he may yet be untrustworthy. Ideally I'd like it to seem to reside entirely in Adele's own perception rather than objective reality. Difficult to do. We'll see if it happens. :)

Somehow I don't think the rewrites will be this month (December) after all. [sigh]