chapter 15

[miriam_e]

The latest part of my Selena City story about Adele, a lesbian in a near future where sexuality is not an issue.

Okay. It finally happens. :D

If offended by lesbian sex do not read this chapter.

part 15 Lessons (3869 words)

Finally got this one done. Been working on it all day. It was unbelieveably difficult to write, not because of challenging subject matter, but because it is plain embarrassing, knowing it was going to be displayed in public and read by people who I know. (Hi Mum. Hi Dad. :)

Took forever to write the beginning of the sex sequence and I was despairing of ever getting it done, when the characters lost their patience with me, took over and wrote it themselves, much to my relief.

Ummm... I should mention that I have posted without being able to make sense of what I'm reading anymore. I'm tired and can no longer see it, so I'm warning you that it might be utter crap. Please let me know of any glaring faults.

Hope everybody enjoys it. Let me know what you think.

Comments

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I'd like to expand on the school in the rewrite. It would be great if it could show people how natural such a setting is and how unnatural are the huge class sizes currently considered "normal". It would also be neat if I could show inventive ways to teach maths and other areas of knowledge.

It would be nice to make the sex scene more lingering and beautiful. It doesn't live up to what I wanted, but I'm glad most comments, like yours, indicate it is better than I thought. :)

Marcus may change in the rewrite. I want him to appear innocent, yet hints that he may yet be untrustworthy. Ideally I'd like it to seem to reside entirely in Adele's own perception rather than objective reality. Difficult to do. We'll see if it happens. :)

Somehow I don't think the rewrites will be this month (December) after all. [sigh]